Draft 2 – I have received a little bit of feedback, all positive. Thus, I haven’t found much in the way of major changes. I added a little more description and cut out a few excess sentences, particularly ones where the protagonist makes guesses as to what the meaning is of the strange things he…… Continue reading The Ability of Gary Cudgel Draft 2
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The Ability of Gary Cudgel
I am taking a break from The Sympathetic Universe for a few weeks in order to try my hand at a writing competition. I won’t describe the competition in detail here, but I will use the next several weeks to demonstrate my writing process. Each week, I will post a draft of my story. This…… Continue reading The Ability of Gary Cudgel
The End of Infinity Part 4
“Boys,” Sarah-Maybeline said with a knowing look on her delicate features. She sat on Vanessa’s bed, her long dress bunched up beneath her. Vanessa sat at her desk and kept her head down on her math homework. “You know,” Sarah-Maybeline said, “you should really go for this football thing.” “Why on Earth would I do…… Continue reading The End of Infinity Part 4
The End of Infinity Part 3
Vanessa’s panic attack, as Dr. Saunder explained it, turned out to be an isolated occurrence. In five years, she had not had another case of feeling like time had stopped and the air was no longer responding to attempts to breathe or move it, and this was so much for the better. Boys didn’t tend…… Continue reading The End of Infinity Part 3
The End of Infinity Part 2
Vanessa Koltrane lived a routine life with her family in a little town near the Adirondack mountains. When her school changed its dress code to allow girls to wear pants, she asked her mother to buy her a pair of blue jeans, but was sternly rebuked and sent to her room. She stared out of…… Continue reading The End of Infinity Part 2
The Sympathetic Universe: The End of Infinity Part 1
I’m going to start labeling my short stories set in “The Sympathetic Universe” separately. For installations after the first, I’ll include only the story title, and leave “The Sympathetic Universe” as a category. A yellow Prius screeched to a halt as Franklin Jones Watson crossed the street back to his apartment from Avengers: Endgame. Frank waved…… Continue reading The Sympathetic Universe: The End of Infinity Part 1
The Sympathetic Universe Part 25
Eloy remembered. Hesitantly, he sloughed off his decrepit old body. He reached out to Gabriel, who at this point it was needless to say was not in Hell. “That was a terrible game,” they agreed. Gabriel’s god chimed in, “Eloy, it was fine until your god wrecked it.” “That game was WRECKED from the START,”…… Continue reading The Sympathetic Universe Part 25
The Sympathetic Universe Part 24
As promised, Eliza made a point of celebrating Christmas on the 25th of December and Destiny’s birthday on January 1st as separate holidays. She also quietly selected s’mores for dessert since it was her day to select on Destiny’s real birthday, December 18th. On January 2nd, the day that next year Destiny had announced would…… Continue reading The Sympathetic Universe Part 24
The Sympathetic Universe Part 23
When there wasn’t much else to distract her attention, which of course was always the case at Camp Virtue, it turned out that Eliza could stay angry for longer than Eloy had previously thought humanly possible. First it was little things. Eliza started going to bed early and skipping Eloy’s regular campfire. Eliza’s calisthenics time…… Continue reading The Sympathetic Universe Part 23
The Sympathetic Universe Part 22
“I don’t like my birthday,” Destiny explained one chilly October morning over breakfast, “because it’s too close to Christmas. All my friends get two parties, but I only get one.” “Well,” said Eliza, pulling a sausage out from her green tupperware, “We won’t combine them. We’ll celebrate and give you gifts for both days.” Destiny’s…… Continue reading The Sympathetic Universe Part 22
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